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Post by LuvSports! Wed 01 Feb 2012, 9:26 pm

http://richard-mills-sports.blogspot.com/2012/01/greatest-grand-slam-achievement.html

any feedback or criticisms would be great.
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Post by noleisthebest Wed 01 Feb 2012, 9:43 pm

I'll be honest: I started reading it with interest and after a paragraph my eyes started glazing over.

This looks like a descriptive and not an argumentative essay.

Most serious tennis fans already know the facts, have their opinions more or less formed and want to hear something new.

You've got to grab our attention with the first two paragraphs . Say something bold and challenge the readers in your opening paragraph.

Follow with pros and cons, ideally concluding with an open dilemma style question.

That's how I'd do it.

Tennis is not hugely popular here and people either love it or couldn't care less.
those who love it know a lot, so you have to be prepared to be a step ahead. good luck Smile!

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Post by noleisthebest Wed 01 Feb 2012, 9:45 pm

Also, in my opinion, passion is an absolute must heart the madder the better!


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Post by LuvSports! Wed 01 Feb 2012, 9:46 pm

haha nitb cheers I think I want to prove you wrong the most and 2bh i wasnt too happy with this one but I think my football one is my best but its early days and i know i have to improve. thanks for the feedback.

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Post by noleisthebest Wed 01 Feb 2012, 9:49 pm

Try following a promising junior. It may seem risky and take ages, but it could be worth it Smile

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Post by LuvSports! Wed 01 Feb 2012, 9:51 pm

I got a job at the uni paper and a work shadow set up so its promising there! The thing is, hence my name luvsports! is that I love footy, rugby, cricket, cycling and tennis so I dont want to just major in one atm i love the diversity.
Again ta for the advice Very Happy

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Post by noleisthebest Wed 01 Feb 2012, 9:51 pm

Sadly, you'll asways be guaranteed instant success if you prop another GOAT discussion, that one never seems run out off fashion....

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Post by noleisthebest Wed 01 Feb 2012, 9:52 pm

In that case DO NOT MISS the golden opportunity of next year's Olympics. Try to get people interested in beach volleyball Wink

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Post by JuliusHMarx Wed 01 Feb 2012, 9:54 pm

noleisthebest wrote:In that case DO NOT MISS the golden opportunity of next year's Olympics. Try to get people interested in beach volleyball Wink

Guys already love women's beach volleyball!

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Post by LuvSports! Wed 01 Feb 2012, 9:55 pm

haha, ye my footy article was about the olympics. I may be working there this summer!
haha they dont need persuading thats the hottest ticket at the games! Laugh

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Post by noleisthebest Wed 01 Feb 2012, 11:32 pm

Here are two examples of passion, enjoy Wink :

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IiUWx7XGNN8&feature=related

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9nTsaoYGlqY

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Post by erictheblueuk Thu 02 Feb 2012, 11:50 am

JuliusHMarx wrote:
noleisthebest wrote:In that case DO NOT MISS the golden opportunity of next year's Olympics. Try to get people interested in beach volleyball Wink

Guys already love women's beach volleyball!

I've watched it for years but I couldn't name you a single player.
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Post by laverfan Thu 02 Feb 2012, 12:10 pm

erictheblueuk wrote:
JuliusHMarx wrote:
noleisthebest wrote:In that case DO NOT MISS the golden opportunity of next year's Olympics. Try to get people interested in beach volleyball Wink

Guys already love women's beach volleyball!

I've watched it for years but I couldn't name you a single player.

Karch Kirai is a name that rings a bell. Wink

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Post by JuliusHMarx Thu 02 Feb 2012, 12:13 pm

I don't recall the name but I'm sure the body is familiar.

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Post by coolpixel Thu 02 Feb 2012, 12:18 pm

i liked the piece thought i dont agree with it. dont be bothered about criticisms about length. if an article is of interest it will be read. JK Rowling's books are 600 pages long, yet they get read.

suggest you space your para properly.

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Post by laverfan Thu 02 Feb 2012, 12:33 pm

JuliusHMarx wrote:I don't recall the name but I'm sure the body is familiar.

Mens player, IIRC, I could not name the Brazilians or the US on the Women's side. Just a personal preference. Wink

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Post by LuvSports! Thu 02 Feb 2012, 1:06 pm

coolpixel wrote:i liked the piece thought i dont agree with it. dont be bothered about criticisms about length. if an article is of interest it will be read. JK Rowling's books are 600 pages long, yet they get read.

suggest you space your para properly.

ta bud duly noted Smile you can engage in women's volleyball if ya want atm my thread is being highjacked but it! Laugh

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